Song Sparrow |
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If you’re a regular here, you might remember that I was quite positive about Deborah Digges’ “Vesper Sparrows” on March 7. Here are the first five lines again:
I love to watch them sheathe themselves mid-air,
shut wings and ride the light’s poor spineto earth, to touch down in gutters, in the rainbowedurine of suicides, just outside Bellevue’s walls.
How many poets of any era would have the ear and the judgment to decide that three lines of unqualified prettiness are enough. Maybe Digges was thinking, "Let’s switch to a different key—oh, I don’t know. Maybe . . . some. . . 'rainbowed/urine of suicides.'” Add in some cadavers from Bellevue, while we're at it.From in there the ransacked cadavers are carried . . .
Will anyone out there claim to have thought of birds sheathing themselves in mid-air, after which their wings are “shut” as they ride “the light’s poor spine//to earth”? Liar! That combination of accuracy and imagination is stunning. More than once in guides to brids, I've read about the "undulating" flight of finches. So how could I have missed the sheathing of wings in the flight of finches and other small birds at dusk? How could I have failed to see that those wings are then, briefly, shut, like the doors of a car? Ms. Digges, you are more observant, more metaphorical, more incisive than I am. I envy it and admire it.
Not much literature of any genre is this rich and dense, sudden and dramatic, yet there's nothing cheap, undeserved, or melodramatic
in Digges' shifts of subject, mood and tone. In those five lines, she
demonstrates why free verse at its best owes no apology to fixed forms of rhyme
and meter. Here once again is the whole poem: Vesper Sparrows by Deborah Digges : The Poetry Foundation
Today I offer another Deborah Digges poem, “Darwin’s
Finches,” which I find lovely, yet not quite the achievement of “Vesper
Sparrows.” To attempt to support
my point, here is Section 1, which I’ve laid out as prose. Why? To suggest that
it might be as close to prose as it is to poetry, which is the risk free verse
always takes. Does it need to be poetry? Does it deserve to be poetry?
Well, “Darwin’s Finches” probably does, hence its usefulness as an example. This makes for pretty rich prose, but it still raises the question, does it need or deserve to be broken into lines of poetry? Look at how natural it sounds and feels without line breaks:
Darwin's Finches by Deborah Digges
My mother always called it a nest, the multi-colored mass harvested from her six daughters' brushes, and handed it to one of us after she had shaped it, as we sat in front of the fire drying our hair. She said some birds steal anything, a strand of spider's web, or horse's mane, the residue of sheep's wool in the grasses near a fold where every summer of her girlhood hundreds nested. Since then I've seen it for myself, their genius— how they transform the useless. I've seen plastics stripped and whittled into a brilliant straw, and newspapers—the dates, the years— supporting the underweavings.
Gold Finch after Evening Bath |
Well, “Darwin’s Finches” probably does, hence its usefulness as an example. This makes for pretty rich prose, but it still raises the question, does it need or deserve to be broken into lines of poetry? Look at how natural it sounds and feels without line breaks:
Darwin's Finches by Deborah Digges
My mother always called it a nest, the multi-colored mass harvested from her six daughters' brushes, and handed it to one of us after she had shaped it, as we sat in front of the fire drying our hair. She said some birds steal anything, a strand of spider's web, or horse's mane, the residue of sheep's wool in the grasses near a fold where every summer of her girlhood hundreds nested. Since then I've seen it for myself, their genius— how they transform the useless. I've seen plastics stripped and whittled into a brilliant straw, and newspapers—the dates, the years— supporting the underweavings.
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Simply by shifting and expanding the subject into a Section 2, Digges builds some energy and interest. Then the shifts within it further deserve the label of poetry—good poetry at that. The subject of mortality and an afterlife have rarely been conveyed with more surprise--and an appropriate delicacy.
Did You Know the Cardinal Is Also a Finch? |
I like and admire both poems, and I don't mean to make everything a competition. However, "Vesper Sparrows" comes out sprinting, charging, and challenging from Line 1 onward, while "Darwin's Finches" takes its time. It might be more elegant and gracious, befitting its themes, but "Vesper Sparrows" astonishes me somewhat gently in Lines 1-3, then turns my head into a punching bag in Line 4 and never lets up. Call me a masochist, but I like that. I'd rather not wait for a poem to find its energy; that's part of my harping about a gift in every line. However, it would be nice to have make such distinctions about kinds of excellence and power in every pair of poems I come across.
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13 comments:
I love the easing in poem you present today.
We need both, the slap and the faked yawn, hand slipped around the shoulder.
I am sure I have posted this Franz Wright poem here before, but that one clobbers me (not very easy at all).
On Earth
Resurrection of the little apple tree outside
my window, leaf-
light of late
in the April
called her eyes, forget
forget-
but how
How does one go
about dying?
Who on earth
is going to teach me-
The world
is filled with people
who have never died
Boom! I've got to go back to the opening a few more times, but the second half has clobber power, for sure--and I bet some of it comes from the trickier, slower first half. Thanks, Hannah. I like that "hand slipped around a shoulder" too; great way to think of some poems.
I admit that this is beyond me (once again :-) ) - I'll have to stay with the original Darwin's finches ...
However, I have no problem with admiring the bird photography!
RuneE, I'm a fan of admitting what you just did. It surely happens to me often enough. As you can probably tell, I urge people to find a single line or image they find appealing, then try to figure out why. Maybe the enjoyment ends there, maybe it grows wider; either way it's a win of some kind.
About the photos, thank you. In my fairly recent venture into bird watching, and bird luring, finches were my first success among colorful birds. They're not shy eaters.
As for Darwin, I only know finches were really, really important in his thinking. I like what Deborah Digges does with his sailors--a dreamy rather than dry, bookish way to work them and Darwin into the poem.
Look at all them werds. Will try later. Pretty birdies.
Southern Indiana talk! I speak it.
Interesting comment via Hannah.
I looked up "Vesper" whose meaning gave Digge's poem a further layer of texture. Now I'm going to have to look up prose. Is the last post I did on Twyla prose? I think your causing me to go back to school
damn it
damn it
damn it Albert
btw: those two last photos are lovely. The background with the cardinal looks like a Jackson Pollock drip painting
Thanks, PA. Surely you have dictionaries stationed at several key locations in your abode . . . It's all the rage.
ha! guess not...
a girlfriend came over yesterday and ripped my Twyla post apart. Misspellings, mis-contractions their there they're blah blah blah etc.
PA, I'm decent at the grammar/spelling biz, but I try to be careful because I've known some others who are excellent at it--and not much else.
I think misspellings are kinda cute -- PA's are. Sometimes it adds to the sincerity of the piece. I do have an issue with those who spell perfectly yet still manage to say nothing.
http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/19201 is the link to Darwin's Finches.
Thanks for the poems and the photos.
Jean, welcome back and thanks for catching the typo.
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I'll blame Blogspot, just as I'm sure they'd blame me. I wonder how many have missed the poem because the address I gave landed them on Bukowski of all people.
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