To a Farmer Who Hung Five Hawks on His Barbed Wire by David Wagoner : The Poetry Foundation
Here are some responses to visitors' comments last time.
Rune, yes, I hear the quiet. And the reversal you speak of. To me, it’s haunting.
Jean, thanks. I like it too, though I doubt it’s sharp
enough. It was a lucky shot, and I’m surprised it turned out as well as it did,
with the colors and textures, foreground and background.
And Jean, “elegant protest letter,” yes. But I wonder if the
speaker has any thought of delivering it. He might get shot. That’s what I
don’t like about the inevitable weakness (word choice?) of his position. And
that ties into AH and Brenda’s points.
About AH’s point and quotation, which might be easy to gloss
over—the farmer’s “strange appetites” and “funny quickenings,” which are not
spoken to “the wife.”
I hear the speaker thinking of the farmer as a loose cannon (word play intended) in a number of ways. Maybe we’re to hear that the dead hawks are not merely a murderous display, but also a perversion, one of several perversions for Gunshot Guy.
So, Jean, I wonder if the speaker would dare to deliver an
actual letter to such a guy.
And all that is now making me wonder, even more than I was,
if the poem is a character study of the speaker as much as the farmer. That in
turn that might lead back to Rune’s point—taking the longer, broader view, the
poem might be about more than these two guys. Maybe it’s a comment on two
elements in human nature, the aggressor and the moral but silent (passive?
frustrated? helpless? cowardly?) observer.
I wish I could feel more authorial control over that from
Wagoner. One old, old rule has always
made perfect sense to me: we must
never mistake the author for a speaker or narrator. But I think this poem needs
to make clearer that it’s about two kinds of human and the complications
involved therein. I don’t feel Wagoner’s control over that; it’s too easy to
assume he’s the speaker, when we need to feel him holding up both speaker and
farmer for our study. If there’s
no difference between Wagoner and his speaker, then the poem really is an
impotent tantrum. Moral and creative, yes, but in the end, an ineffectual rant.
So, Brenda, “bottled up” is key. Is it only the speaker
who’s bottled up, or is it the author and therefore the whole poem as well?
Your paradox of “by doing nothing, something is done”—could you explain that
further? The speaker has exposed
the farmer even if he hasn’t stopped him, and that amounts to “something is
done”? And dreaming of revenge is a higher road than actually, physically
taking revenge? I think those ideas are promising, but intricate. Am I anywhere
close to paraphrasing you accurately?
If I put together what all the visitors are saying with what
I was saying, does it amount to the point that exposing corruption is often all
we can do without becoming another corrupt psycho-aggressor ourselves? Morality
is hamstrung by the necessary avoidance of fighting fire with fire? We hand that job over to our
professional warriors?
Does all this tie into a Zen approach or a Christian turning
of the other cheek? And does Wagoner’s birthing of these ponderings mean
the poem is excellent in spite of what might be its limitations?
To a Farmer Who Hung Five Hawks on His Barbed Wire by David Wagoner : The Poetry Foundation
To a Farmer Who Hung Five Hawks on His Barbed Wire by David Wagoner : The Poetry Foundation
I've never been to Deer Creek but have often wondered what it's like. I need to head up there one of these days.
May 13, 2012 11:54 PM
As a father of three girls and and a boy, I know the situation all too well. :-) Being with your parents doing what you used to love, but now feel that you are growing out of - only you haven't. The relationship and the fun is still there. It's all about the process of growing up and getting independent. You discover that blood is still thicker than water and that you have more in common than the family name. Oh - beautifully written (I'm sure I have lost many of the nice details) with fitting photographs :-)
I see what you mean about the ending. I think it hangs on the word "weighing"...
I thought of that Elizabeth Bishop poem, "The Fish," which is not at all my favorite poem of hers (but perhaps one of the most often anthologized). I think there is something to this....that there is a trope of the fishing poem. Maybe?
The poet Marita Dachsel has a strong fish poem ("Fish Stories"). I can't find the full text....just these lines: "The gills were still moving when my father inserted his knife/…when he scooped out the organs he saw the heart still/ pumping. He said nothing…and then/ placed it in my open palm."
The invisible line pulled taut that links them both"
Those two lines in and of them selves have a rather pleasing appeal.Yes, they do seem jagged and contrived placed where they are.
It's always a pleasure to watch you map out a poem into it's rules and regulations via that hard light. I always regret that I wasn't able to grasp (or be exposed) to those kind of concepts when I was young.
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